In this blog post I will be writing two thesis statements for my project 2. They will be slightly different and discussed in the end of the blog post
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In the article, "Should we teach computer science in elementary school?", the reader sees Pat Yongpradit arguing the "yes" side and Beth Schwartze arguing for the "no" side. Yongpradit believes computer science should be taught to elementary students because of it's effects on learning, the economy, and the best interest of the child. On the other hand, Schwartze views this idea as negative, stating how it shouldn't be implemented due to funding, educational priorities, and the capabilities of the students.
Pat Yongpradit and Beth Schwartze share their opposing views on whether or not computer science should be taught in elementary schools. Both authors use emotional appeals to the audience to try and draw them in their favor. Since this topic is very personal to many people since it is involving children, both authors discuss points such as the education, future, and benefits/hardships of the children when it comes to teaching them computer science in elementary school.
The first statement is very structured and the way that it is written would allow me to write my project following the chronology of the statement. While the second statement is not as structured, it does discuss the rhetorical strategies more and would lead to a project that analyzes how the author achieves what they are doing rather than why which is what the first statement aspires to do.
Reflection: I read the blog posts of Stef and Olivia. They both had very strong thesis statements written in their posts and could definitely have a start on their project using one of their thesis statements they created. After reading the book and their thesis statements, I learned that all three of us need to include the rhetorical strategies and techniques used by the author and how that has an effect on the audience. We all gave the reader an idea of what side the author stands on in the debate and why, but we need to include how the author conveys this to the reader. That is the challenge with a thesis statement, it has to include a lot of different parts but be concise at the same time.
I agree with your analysis of the thesis statements. I think that the first one is more detailed, however the second one actually mentions rhetorical strategy and allows the reader to know what the essay is going to be about and how you are going to analyze the article for rhetoric. I think finding a mix of the two would be awesome.
ReplyDeleteHi Hunter! I really like the second thesis statement, but I think that you should add the title of the essay, like you did in the first.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the second draft. I do think however, that instead of blatantly stating the type of rhetorical situation, you give an example from the article that demonstrates that type of argument.
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